17 November
she sat at an isolated table in the corner of a darkened bar
her legs were long and lanky stretched out beneath her
her mouth was silky smooth
and her wit was razor sharp
he had gotten close enough to feel her pain
and know that her breath was as sweet as the whiskey
she was drinking from a murky shot glass
that left a puddle on the scarred wooden table
he had been a bit befuddled at first
when he saw her walking out of the marsh
but now he knew she was not a part of the human race
my boyfriend just told me that he has met a few women like this.....
I think I would have run at the first sign that she was not of the human race!
ReplyDeleteThat last bit, about her not being part of the human race, caught me completely by surprise!
ReplyDeleteWhirling with Donald Hall
Alien love -- I really love that... :-)
ReplyDeletegreat story!!! have a nice Sunday
ReplyDeletemuch love...
Love a love story with an alien...
ReplyDeletesuperb surprize ending, your boyfriend's comment made me laugh...
ReplyDeleteYes the last two lines really turned this piece on its head..carefully and cleverly written..
ReplyDeleteha. what a character you created...the details you use really bring this to life....very nice...wonder what the kids will look like...smiles.
ReplyDeleteI am way behind - and playing catch up. I hope you are enjoying a wonderful weekend!
ReplyDeleteI loved this! Such a sense of place. The table, the bar, and this woman, this marsh- being. A great story.
ReplyDeleteClever!
ReplyDeleteI have seen Navy guys all over her~ You did a great job with this one! ;D
ReplyDeleteHow you get your readers to crave for more. I wanted to continue to eavesdrop.
ReplyDeleteLove this character - and I'm sure there are many like these.
ReplyDeleteFirst I felt spooky and then felt as if there's an alien!.
ReplyDeleteA true Siren... enjoyed this - like the opening lines of a mystery novel. xo Karen
ReplyDeleteOooo. I wonder where she is from…?
ReplyDeleteLove that ending...
ReplyDeleteHere is my Sunday Swirl post:
bridging the past with the future