they gathered to celebrate
no longer tethered to this earthly life
he had worn his crown well
it was tattered and torn
was he in a loft above them -he would have scoffed
It reads as a different meaning to me. Were sounds like if her were there he would be scoffing. Was is more of him scoffing at the idea that there even is a loft above them.
That scoff raises questions! I wonder why he would react in such a way? Is he amused? Disappointed? I like the bit of mystery behind it. Thank you for linking up. Voting is now active so be sure to come back!
Deep peace of the running wave to you. Deep peace of the flowing air to you. Deep peace of the quiet earth to you. Deep peace of the shining stars to you. Deep peace of the gentle night to you. Moon and stars pour their healing light on you
Very nice....'were' also fits well instead of 'was' perhaps..
ReplyDeleteIt reads as a different meaning to me. Were sounds like if her were there he would be scoffing. Was is more of him scoffing at the idea that there even is a loft above them.
Deleteno longer tethered to his earthly life - beautiful words! Loved the entry.
ReplyDeleteLovely words - no longer tethered to his earthly life...
ReplyDeleteThink you need to use the exact word i.e 'tether' not 'tethered'. Sorry for being a pain!
ReplyDeletethanks for letting me know.
DeleteThis is great work.
ReplyDeleteThe crown was tethered and torn. Poor person . nice read.
ReplyDeleteI liked the 'no longer tethered to this earthly life' line, too. It is both liberating, and sad at the same time.
ReplyDeletegood use of the English language...
ReplyDeletegood use of the language
ReplyDeleteTethered to his earthly life... great use ..
ReplyDeleteThat scoff raises questions! I wonder why he would react in such a way? Is he amused? Disappointed? I like the bit of mystery behind it.
ReplyDeleteThank you for linking up. Voting is now active so be sure to come back!