Shining through the branches of a big old pine tree
When Joe comes home from working nights he flops his cap down on the kitchen table. It is an Irish sculls cap and when he wears it with his mask at work they say he looks like a Southie (Irish part of Boston) bank robber. I just like the way it looks on my kitchen table and I’m glad he’s not a bank robber. My sister had to get some scans in Boston and spent the week at my mums. I had them up for dinner one night. This isn’t the greatest picture of her...I think I caught her in mid-chew. Sunday I met with both of my daughters and my grandchildren. We were the only ones in the pizza place and felt comfortable taking our masks off while we ate. It was the first time we’ve all been together in such a very long time. It brought me to tears. I rise before the sun most mornings and see it coming up over the neighboring houses like ribbons of orange and indigo light. One morning this week I happened to glance up and see the crescent moon setting behind the big, old pine while the sky was
ha. sneaky you. intriguing...def a bare bones verse...i wonder what you started with?
ReplyDeleteReading this makes me want to write something tight like that. Very skillfully done.
ReplyDeleteI think you could cutt this down to one short line ...
ReplyDeleteI think, that for these purposes, you may be right. "I steal in through the gate" does say an awful lot.
Deletenow that is edited down to its essence, yet says enough for us to get the mind going..smiles
ReplyDeleteVery concise and your view words create an aura for the story behind it--a moment.>KB
ReplyDeleteLove it!
ReplyDeleteHe, he, he . . . have to wonder about the original.
ReplyDeleteThe imagination runs wild and faster than our feet! Wonderful dear!
ReplyDeletenow that is an edit... hmmm, I wonder what will happen
ReplyDeleteI think the first line is important as it sets the scene far more than just the second line alone. What you are "stealing into" is important for "mood". The brevity here is unique and fun.
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