8 December

he had become his own prison

 pursuing the cold cruel cash

as if it could be a beloved

he cloaked the wild in himself

he looked through a lens 

-a box on the wall -

that skirted the real issues

and he reached for goods as if they were


 like a venus in the sky

trying to shine

but he never never looked up



  1. WoW! I love this … and your first and last lines are dynamite!

  2. I think maybe he never gave up either?

  3. Nice imagery here. Great on the prompt!

  4. I particularly like the line, 'he cloaked the wild in himself' I enjoy this sunday whirl.

  5. LOVE! The spirit that threads through your words shares wisdom. I love "he reached for goods as if they were stars..."

  6. Yes..the last line certainly made me lookup..true indeed

  7. Nicely done. This is the human condition, head down, bowed, art the treadmill to consumerism.

  8. One must wonder if he is afraid to look up, afraid he might find his true face reflected in those far away lights.... Well woven,


  9. How the words suggest the greed, temptation, abuse and hedonism of humanity. Luckily the stars have patience and hopefully mankind will look up eventually but not before much harm is done. Perhaps poets at least will understand Christmas!

  10. I like that he never gave up, we will not fail, as long as we never give up....

  11. Masterful use of the words.

  12. This is definitely my favorite!


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