8 September
some people used only linear dimensions
avenues laid straight in front of them
invariable, unbent, unswerving
my answers seem to be at the center
of a magic ball some times
am I the only one to be intrigued by that ringing bell
and then I remember
there are stains on all of us
we all pay a price for being alive
OOOOO... I love "and then I remember...." and what follows it. This one made me say, yeah, me too. Strong write that hits a universal. Brava!
ReplyDeleteVery deep and intriguing.
ReplyDeleteI can so sympathize with that end.. I hope the prize is always worth paying ...
ReplyDelete"there are stains on all of us, we all pay a price for being alive." Amazing!
ReplyDeleteVery nice indeed - like the simplicity and depth here 'there are stains on all of us
ReplyDeletewe all pay a price for being alive' is terrific. With Best Wishes Scott www.scotthastie.com
Deep thinking here. My life has few straight lines. Sometimes that;s good, sometimes not. ;)
ReplyDeleteDang! we do pay a price for living and getting stained in one way reo the other till we find a balance.
ReplyDeleteThis is definitely not in linear dimension!
ReplyDeletereading the menu in the clouds outside
Wowzers. You hit this one right out of the park! Those closing lines say it all.
ReplyDeleteWe definitely do--maybe karmic. Thanks for the intriguing poem. k.
ReplyDeletedang...there is a heavy moment in that...we do all pay the price for sure...i agree with bjorn as well...
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ReplyDeletethe last line is so poignant........
we all pay a price for being alive - and yet, we forget sometimes (or fear) to really live
ReplyDeletei like the originality of your poem, and the way it flows
that makes me think of string theory and cosmology and the hidden dimensions,
ReplyDeleteWe all have our cross(es) to carry...
ReplyDeletewe all pay a price for being alive...very well said.
ReplyDeleteYeppers - some of us see in a holistic manner . . . I guess all the unique views add up to something holy . . .
ReplyDeleteNicely done! :-)
ReplyDeleteSo very true. We all do pay a price for being alive. A very strong message in your words.
ReplyDeleteSo much truth in your words here. Nice poem.
ReplyDeletePamela
It is in our nature to try anything and make mistakes in the process but my how it is worth it in the successes we have.
ReplyDeleteWell done!
ReplyDeletewe all pay a price for being alive...
ReplyDelete...well said.
This poem is magical and full of great thoughts! :)
ReplyDeleteMy pantry poems were inspired by the sharing economy.
This poem made me pause in thought . . . you are so right, there are stains on all of us. Great writing.
ReplyDeleteThat we all pay a price seems to be a common theme. There is surely whimsy in your wile! Brings many thoughts to mind.
ReplyDeletethere are stains on all of us
ReplyDeletewe all pay a price for being alive
Life is such that there are aspects of life that need 'cleaning up'. One is faced with risks all the time just to solve them. Nicely!
Hank
Such truth in your write. Nothing is free is it?
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