15 September
in short 30 second TV clips
they seek vibrant eyes
and violet lips
does this make me look vivacious?
does this make me look sumptuous?
does this make me sassy and single?
they slather themselves with vacuous manipulations
and spread their legs
for the master
ugh..i doesn't - and spreading legs for the master - better get rid of that violet lipstick you know..
ReplyDeleteWow, this is a strong statement on the objectification of women in the media. Well done.
ReplyDeleteDigital relay...
ReplyDeleteStabbing choking
They must be joking
like mechanical lover's
Stabbing choking they must be joking
ReplyDeleteBy Robert Pollard of guided by voices
This piece gets to the point quickly, and seemingly effortlessly!
ReplyDeleteNight Class in German
oh dang....what a close eh? yikes....we def worship beauty and find incredible ways to achieve it...sad really
ReplyDeleteThat worship is not healthy.. and I also read objectification of women into your words... very good.
ReplyDeleteWow, strong piece. You have an amazing way with words.
ReplyDeleteThat was brilliant. I detest adverts with a passion bordering on insanity. Wonderful!
ReplyDeleteYes they do. Strong write, it reads almost like an expose'.
ReplyDeleteWhat a twist at the end. Nicely done. Great share. :-)
ReplyDeleteI knew it was headed for a wow ending from the first line...it caught my attention immediately.
ReplyDeleteA strong and powerful (and unfortunately all too true) statement! Well done!
ReplyDeleteIt takes skill to make something that makes sense from the words in the Whirl. You accomplished it greatly & made a strong point.
ReplyDeleteThe question:
ReplyDeletedoes this make me sassy and single?
Is really central to the poem. Nice!
Absolutely. And then wonder why kids are acting out sexually younger and younger. Strong and pithy statement.
ReplyDeleteEnding lines are killer ~ I hate it when people sell themselves brazenly for 30 second commercial ~ Good one ~
ReplyDeleteTV has no conscience and it hurts everyone it sees.
ReplyDeleteA great statement made in this piece.
ReplyDeleteWonderful whirl with that extra oomph!
ReplyDeleteVery good one - and clever use of both prompts.
ReplyDeleteAnna :o]
ReplyDeletegreat voice......very timely...
Splendid, and timely indeed.
ReplyDeletePamela
Nice work!
ReplyDeleteI think I dated her when she was working on her doctorate in Italian Lit. :-)
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