15 September







in short 30 second TV clips

they seek vibrant eyes

and violet lips

does this make me look  vivacious?
does this make me look sumptuous?

does this make me sassy and single? 

they slather themselves with vacuous manipulations
and spread their legs
for the master








Comments

  1. ugh..i doesn't - and spreading legs for the master - better get rid of that violet lipstick you know..

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  2. Wow, this is a strong statement on the objectification of women in the media. Well done.

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  3. Digital relay...
    Stabbing choking
    They must be joking
    like mechanical lover's

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  4. Stabbing choking they must be joking
    By Robert Pollard of guided by voices

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  5. This piece gets to the point quickly, and seemingly effortlessly!

    Night Class in German

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  6. oh dang....what a close eh? yikes....we def worship beauty and find incredible ways to achieve it...sad really

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  7. That worship is not healthy.. and I also read objectification of women into your words... very good.

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  8. Wow, strong piece. You have an amazing way with words.

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  9. That was brilliant. I detest adverts with a passion bordering on insanity. Wonderful!

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  10. Yes they do. Strong write, it reads almost like an expose'.

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  11. What a twist at the end. Nicely done. Great share. :-)

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  12. I knew it was headed for a wow ending from the first line...it caught my attention immediately.

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  13. A strong and powerful (and unfortunately all too true) statement! Well done!

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  14. It takes skill to make something that makes sense from the words in the Whirl. You accomplished it greatly & made a strong point.

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  15. The question:
    does this make me sassy and single?
    Is really central to the poem. Nice!

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  16. Absolutely. And then wonder why kids are acting out sexually younger and younger. Strong and pithy statement.

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  17. Ending lines are killer ~ I hate it when people sell themselves brazenly for 30 second commercial ~ Good one ~

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  18. TV has no conscience and it hurts everyone it sees.

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  19. A great statement made in this piece.

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  20. Wonderful whirl with that extra oomph!

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  21. Very good one - and clever use of both prompts.
    Anna :o]

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  22. great voice......very timely...

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  23. Splendid, and timely indeed.

    Pamela

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  24. Nice work!
    I think I dated her when she was working on her doctorate in Italian Lit. :-)
    ZQ

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